After reading Anne Lamotts essay it gave me a sense of encouragement for my essay. In her essay she talks about how the great authors write bad first drafts and they know that not everything that they write right away is going to be their best work. I did not feel like my first draft was my best work but after reading this essay it has given me some more confidence. I think that it will take some time to write a good essay but if I keep going with my rough draft I think that I will be able to have a good paper.
I have made many goals for my revisions with my essay. One goal is to add some sources from outside the direct reading to help further help back up my claims. I also want to make my thesis stronger and make the essay more personalized by adding more of my personal opinion. I also want to improve on making my paragraphs by intertwining the Ted Talk and Southan’s essay. In my first draft I don’t think that I did a good enough job of including both of those into my paragraphs, I just did one or the other. Being able to work in groups I think is a real beneficial to me because it allows other people to look at my paper and give their opinion.
